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:iconviki-u:
hello there :>
i don't like it when i see an artist has requested a critique and no one has bothered :iconlazeplz: so here i go

Positives:
. the pose and anatomy looks very good so far
. her face and hair look very sweet and i like the detail you put into them

Negatives:
. her arms are my main issue, her right arm should be shorter after her elbow cause if she straightened her arm her hands would be past her knees
. her left hand looks awkward. 1st it is bigger then her right hand, and the position of her fingers looks uncomfortable. Instead of her middle finger going to her ring finger i could just be straight, plus the hand should be more under the cup (if that makes any sense). Here are some images that might help you [link] [link] [link] if those aren't really what you were imaging then I say you can always take a cup and hold it your self in the way you want and ref that C:
. I would personally give her a bigger forehead, by just raising the hair/fringe higher, but that is more down to style then proportions

So, overall i really like the anatomy and how this drawing has started, but to improve it you can fix the hand/arms. I look forward to seeing the final picture :iconcoolplz:
good luck and I hope you found some help in this critique
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Hi piiche-chan :D
Just wanted to write a critique...my drawing is not as good as yours, but critism is always good!!
First of all, your coloring style is really soft, sweet and really just pulls the lineart together nicely. it works so well with making her look just so sweet and innocent! The mixture of Cell and soft cell...its just so great!! The shine also is not too much or not to little, but still gives her the affect of being in a bright room. One problem i had was the cat was kind of plain compared to the lighting of the girl, i barely noticed him at first! Besides that, Keep up the good work!!!
Another thing i loved loved loved is the eyes and outfit. you got really creative with the eyes. the hearts on the inside make her look even more innocent and ultra cute! Her outfit is simple, but is a great design for chibis and all the bows just add to the cute design.
As with looking at the early lineart, I was able to notice more mistakes with the girl. In my opinion, the arms are longer then a legs. I dont think its as much as a mistake with the arms as it is the legs. The legs are just a tad bit smaller then they need to be for both the size of the arms and the body. Two other problems i had was the glasses. Glasses need to be equal and the right lens just seem off. The placeing of the left lens is perfect for her, though!
Besides all that, your drawing is so so Adorable!!!! I can tell you put alot of time and work into this and it came out so nice! All mistakes where minor and there is not many. Good work, Piiche, and i cant wait for future drawings! ^w^
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:iconfifiski:
Fifiski Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
She looks cute ^_^
I like the colouring and the eyes are adorable :heart:

<3
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:iconmyaoh:
myaoh Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013
Thank you very much!
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cautioncone16 Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2012
Very cute! I wish I had a little maid
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:iconmyaoh:
myaoh Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013
Thank you! Hehe
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cautioncone16 Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013
Your welcome! :)
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GrowingFantasy Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2012
So cute :3
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:iconmyaoh:
myaoh Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013
Thank you!
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GrowingFantasy Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013
You're Welcome ^-^
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cddmanful Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Very cute--love the glasses and the cat on her head~~~
She is an interesting OC!
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:iconmyaoh:
myaoh Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013
Thank you!
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IdoodleChibis Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I love your chibis ; w ; and you so great at coloring themm!!! Super cute c:
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:iconmyaoh:
myaoh Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013
Thank you!
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VVanielle Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012
Awww, sooo cute!!!!!! <3
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:iconmyaoh:
myaoh Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013
Thank you!
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:iconvvanielle:
VVanielle Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013
You're welcome >3<
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Rai-Shi Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh my gosh! It turned out so amazing!! ; u ; I love the cloths and oh my goodness; those eyes!! <333 So pretty! Thank you so much, hunny :hug: You're such an amazing artist!~
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myaoh Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013
Thank you!
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PINKDIAMOND3000 Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012  Student Digital Artist
cute!
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:iconmyaoh:
myaoh Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013
Thank you!
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:iconpinkdiamond3000:
PINKDIAMOND3000 Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013  Student Digital Artist
you`re welcome!
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UkiyamiAngel Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012   Traditional Artist
aw she came out so well!
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:iconmyaoh:
myaoh Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013
Thank you!
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UkiyamiAngel Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013   Traditional Artist
welcome!!!
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:iconpeachiu:
Peachiu Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
How adorable!
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:iconmyaoh:
myaoh Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013
Thank you!
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:iconpeachiu:
Peachiu Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem!
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cautioncone16 Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012
Excellent work! Very sweet
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:iconmyaoh:
myaoh Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013
Thank you!
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cautioncone16 Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013
Your welcome!
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VampressWolf Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012
Oh I'm not good at critiques. I don't feel like I can really critique others when my work isn't that great ^^' I love the detail. I do agree that her hand looks a little awkward. Her fingers are what look off. Love the work! Can't wait to see the finished product ^w^
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:iconmyaoh:
myaoh Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013
Thank you!
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VampressWolf Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013
welcome! Sorry for the delayed response...been so busy @.@
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Skixzer Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Student Digital Artist
I love your new style! Especially the eyes style you've been using!
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myaoh Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013
Thank you!
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cddmanful Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I see absolutely nothing wrong with the lineart--all very clear, nicely chibi-proportioned, and a cute kitty on her head....and glasses! Glasses FTW!
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:iconmyaoh:
myaoh Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013
Thank you!
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Robyns-Roost Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This looks very good :) I look forward to the outcome :)
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:iconmyaoh:
myaoh Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013
Thank you!
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Yumichan216 Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This looks great already ;u;
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:iconmyaoh:
myaoh Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013
Thank you!
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Yumichan216 Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome >u<
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kirottan Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
owww so pretty! can't wait for see this finished
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:iconmyaoh:
myaoh Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013
Thank you!
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:iconkirottan:
kirottan Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013
you're welcome ~
It was a pleasure ♥
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xineli Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
Ahhhhhhhh I can't wait until it's finished ; A ;
Um... All Ican say is that the left arm looks a bit bigger (or it's just the angle I'm looking from) an the dress skirt should be a bit more flow or add wrinkles because it's a bit stiff.
Overall everything seems fine. Can't say much.
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myaoh Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
Thank you for the critique
Ahh you're right, I will fix that.
And yeah when I color I add wrinkles and such ^^
Thank you <3
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xineli Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
You're welcome~
And oh you ad wrinkles when you color okay xD
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brookncole Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
she looks like a cute little librarian :iconiluplz:
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:iconmyaoh:
myaoh Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
Thank you ^^
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brookncole Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
welcomezz teehee :giggle:
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